Attorney 5 recently had me proof-read an article he's writing for non-lawyers. Let me first say that I think Attorney 5 is a very smart guy. Everything he gives me to proof-read is always very concise, well-written and well-argued (until Attorney 2 gets to a hold of it, that is). However, he struggles writing things for non-lawyers.
Having read his article, I'm compiled a brief list of things not to do when writing to a non-lawyer:
1) Block quote statutes.
2) Cite statutes to fill up space.
3) Use make-believe legal combo words, like: heretofore, wherefore or hereinafter.
4) Use footnotes (seriously, nobody reads footnotes).
5) Go over tangentially related background information.
With my typical tact, this is the feedback I gave Attorney 5: "Dude, I wanted to stop reading halfway through the first block quote from the ILCS - and I actually went to law school"